Hi, your writing is good, but it will be even better if you can elaborate more on the topic.

• You can make an introduction to alcohol first before jumping into the main entree.
• Before explaining about comatose, maybe you can tell some specific about alcohol intoxication. How much is needed for a person to get drunk generally?
• I think you forgot to put your article's references perhaps?

Put more thought into your article, and you can make it better. Good luck and have a good day.