SSP 100 Days Challenge (Day 66): STANZA BONANZA

This is my sixty-sixth entry for the Steemit School of Poetry 100 Days Challenge.
STANZA BONANZA
contempt smirk
mini skirt
blatant flirt
with a jerk
works as clerk
who goes first
which such thirst
will it burst?
will disperse
hair split
throat slit
happy Brit
with no wit
broken hips
movie clips
water drips
track skips
cracking whips
a coin flips
irregular beats
folder pleats
taken seats
soiled sheets
busy streets
nothing’s neat
lucky hipster
evil trickster
lonely mister
pointer sisters
how sinister
dark minister
good blend
happy friends
would you lend?
don't offend
will transcend
the front-end
with amends
till the end
NOTES
This poem is a game of words and rhythm. It you read it without expecting too much of it perhaps funny mental images will come to your mind. It's a ludic experiment.
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Un collage de imágenes muy sonoras, mi buen @sansoncarrasco. Me detuve a ver la imagen de poema y me reencontré con unas marcas que estaban en el baúl de los recuerdos. Tiempos aquellos...:(
Gracias por leer y sorry por la nostalgia.
Me encantaron las imagenes me recordaron una infancia feliz.
Hay que saber para combinar asi las letras. Meti el poema en el traductor de ingles, queria ver a que sabia o sonaba ja ja ja
Sonrisa de desprecio
minifalda
coqueteo flagrante
con un tirón
trabaja como empleado
todo suena tan comico en otro idioma.
Siempre dando una vueltica por aqui y disfrutando el contenido.
Jejeje si suena cómico, el traductor mete mucho la pata. Gracias por apreciar. De un tiempo ara acá estoy agregando unas notas al final que explican lo que quise lograr con cada poema.
This is pure poetic Pop-Art and I adore it. I find this piece catchy, fun, and intriguing with the fast moving rotation of images, some of which are very surreal in that they seem to be far out from the flow and yet work with it at the same time. Some of these kernels are just strange, and delightfully so as they add to the very modern tone of the poem. Anyone that knows me, knows I love these rhythmic ditties and this one delivers an even more satisfying facet when sung-out in a rap like delivery — that said, this piece holds up (for me) as a written word-play poem that one can just sing on the inside without vocalizing out loud. I think you paired the photography perfectly too, in case there was any confusion as to this being a Pop-Art piece the 2d art hammers it in.
I have only a couple questions: Why the question marks? In a way I think they are fun and add another layer, yet, I feel they are not necessary at the same time (of course I understand the literal question of the lines involved, but this is word-play poetry, so the rules are blurry).
Have you thought of recording this poem, or playing around with it via a time-arts piece?
Fabulously fun piece.
P.S. I apologize for any typos or funky sentences, I’m so busy, as in, I’ve been up over eighteen hours today and am going to be for the next two day in the same fashion (such are my weekends.), hopefully someone like Mister Guy will come in and edit me. lol.
Marvelous feedback. Thank you very much for such complete insight.
Well, as you said they add another layer of meaning as if the phrase is not completely whimsical but could gain full sense with the participation of the reader. It also changes the rhythm surprising the reader.
No. But now that you mention it, it would be fun.