Set Me free(Day 88)
I want to be free
Soar the skies and drink my tea
I want to see far and sail the seas
Having parties like I'm on a happy spree
Set me free
My joy is bound amidst trees
Within my heart is divided into three
I want healing, I want to be free
I want to be free
That's my song, that's me
Save me from frowns, give me glee
I want to fight sorrows though I'm not Jet Li
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As you may have guessed from my poetry, I love rhyme. I really enjoyed this poem and it’s sing-song appeal.
Just a couple of notes. Structure wise I would start the second stanza with I want to be free to keep the pattern. Maybe end the stanza with set me free.
For flow’s sake I would say “admidst the tree’ rather than admidst trees”
I’m a little confused with the part about your heart divided into three. What do you mean by that?
Also the Jet Li thing is quite humorus but it definitely seems out of place.
Amyway keep up the good work.