Steemit Slam #1 / My Best Friend's Cousin

in #slam7 years ago (edited)

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My Best Friend’s Cousin

She is heavy boned and freckled with shyness,
visiting from Michigan while her parents
are patching things up.

I accept a blind date.
The radio sputters with uncertain weather.

Her hair, like Irish Setter ears, clowns
with her eyes. She is eager
to get out of the house
and go to the movies.

Our Junior Mints rattle
like grade school maracas.

She whispers, “poor cartoon Tom
wouldn’t survive on a farm,
he is not a good mouser.”

Her fingertips push grains of salt
over the edge the table. I sense that she
likes me and laugh as she asks how
it feels to be handsome.

A gust of wind fluffs her pink earmuffs.
My leather shoes crunch frozen snow
as I fumble with keys. The door of my father's
old Fairlane opens like lake ice.

She slides on the vinyl and cuddles
my shoulder. A Thunderbird passes,
the driver is the councilman’s daughter
and waves to be seen.

A snow plow scrapes down the streets.
I park by the curb, give her a kiss
as if asking a question.

She guides my hand under her sweater,
then says that her bus leaves tomorrow
and asks me to write.

note: My Best Friend's Cousin is a re-write of a poem I first had published in Midwestern Gothic Literary Journal.

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So awesome , I liked it
Followed , upvoted

Thanks, it was fun to write. Pop

You're welcome
Can you check out my blog ?

Upped wire sculpture.

I don't understand you

I voted for one of your posts, wire sculpture.

Thanks a lot

This a very cheerful poem

Thanks glad you enjoyed it.

Very, very nice one..

Hello Dale, nice to meet you! I'm excited to see a poet like you on Steemit. Keep enjoying us here. We definitely need voices like yours.

Thanks, steemit is a nice place.

This is excellent writing. So polished and a perfect example of "show, don't tell." The piece left a lot to the imagination and left me wanting more. The scenes it portrayed were quite lovely as well. All the best in the competition!

Love your comment, not just because it is offering praise, but because it shows you have a great understanding of poetry.

I checked out your poem, up voted and commented. I also followed.

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