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RE: A New Body Experience (Serial Novel Pt. 2)
I can only really echo my thoughts from the previous comment.
My only critique is I would have liked to have seen more of Kathy in the process of selecting her vessel. You get the idea across, with her cycling through many of them, but I think there's an opportunity to dive even deeper into the psychology of her character.
That said, bravo! Another great entry!
Thank you michaias! That's a very fair criticism, and you're definitely right that we're giving a heavy dose of Theo's insecurities without much of an idea what Kathy's might be. Thank you for reading, and even more so for helping me find ways to improve. Glad you're enjoying it so far