Flow is on point the whole way through. Maybe one TINY mess up at the end of those quick 4 bars where you took that hard breathe. But was barely perceptible and you got right back on the beat after the very first word, so no big deal at all. Just would say to try to get some smaller breathes somewhere in there.
You definitely have delivery down, but I would say sometimes less is more, especially when it's not on a mixed down/mastered track. When it's done on something like this, where the recording quality isn't top notch, it can be hard to understand what's being said. I could tell you had enunciation down just by the tone, but when you would go OVER THE TOP on the delivery part, enunciation lacked a bit.
Content was cool. Probably the weakest part of the track, but that's not a big deal because it's like a quick 40 second track and not anything to go spend days on trying to get that ***** quality shit, ya know?
Rhyme scheme is dope and definitely shows that you've put plenty of time into perfecting your craft. Dig it.
All in all, was diggin this man. Obviously I listened to it a few times, haha. Anyway, I dropped a verse for this week's competition too. Feed for feed?
True that dude no disrespect to anyone else here! I've sifted through the other submissions and WOW a lot better than what you'd hear in the underground for SC or YT.
Nice entry man. I loved the energy and passion you put into it. We fighting demons and devils with Christ on our side. Keep flowing and writing sharp rhymes. God bless
Hey @vibekilla I can't see or hear your entry on this old iPad of mine but I'll be sure to check it out when I get access to my desktop later.
All in all, was diggin this man. Obviously I listened to it a few times, haha. Anyway, I dropped a verse for this week's competition too. Feed for feed?
LOVE IT!!!! YOU'RE THE ONLY OTHER DOPE EMCEE ON HERE. WE GOTTA DO SOME SERIOUS SHIT OUTSIDE OF A FREESTYLE LET STEEM KNOW WHO IN CHARGE!
There are a lot of dope emcees on Steemit, you will find more of them the more you reach out and connect. Glad you found the Hip Hop community here
True that dude no disrespect to anyone else here! I've sifted through the other submissions and WOW a lot better than what you'd hear in the underground for SC or YT.
Nice entry man. I loved the energy and passion you put into it. We fighting demons and devils with Christ on our side. Keep flowing and writing sharp rhymes. God bless