Everything has been consummated - Todo se ha consumado - challenge of 100 days of Poetry- Day 75
Greetings, Steemians and companions from #steemitschoolpoetry.
We are on day 75, heading for 100. I thank the people who support me and who have read what I am creating for the challenge of 100 days of Poetry summoned by #steemitschool and @d-pend. Always waiting for your kind look and that you like them.
My musical theme that I connect to, between lines, with this creation is: Sorrow -Hans Zimmer and Lisa Gerrard
"The road to hell is paved with adverbs"
Everything has been consummated
of the oracle fell
nailed in a dark sea.
The cage is already closed,
the bird suffocated in its weeping.
The confused skies of dawn
they brought shadow lights.
it only slipped into small rivers of painful decision.
Long faces folded in the afternoon.
the abstention played to lose.
"It rains what has to rain."
Saludos, Steemianos hispanohablantes.
Estamos en el día 75, en dirección a 100. Agradezco a las personas que me apoyan y que han leído lo que estoy creando para el desafío de 100 días de Poesía, convocado por #steemitschool. Siempre esperando su gentil mirada y que les guste.
Todo se ha consumado
del oráculo cayó
clavada en un mar oscuro.
La jaula ya se cerró,
el pájaro se asfixió en su llanto.
Los cielos confundidos del alba
trajeron luces de sombras.
sólo soltó cortos ríos de penosa decisión.
Caras largas doblaron la tarde.
la abstención jugó para perder.
"Que llueva lo que tenga que llover".
Original poem by @zeleiracordero
Reading notes: III
May 21 , 2018
Thanks to @d-pend and to #steemitschool for the creation of this space to share our creations.
And, very especially, to my invaluable friend @onthewayout.
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For accompanying me, reading me and always being there ... Simply THANKS
Por acompañarme, leerme y estar ahí...
Thanks to @d-pend and to #steemitschool for the creation of this space to share our creations.
And, very especially, to my invaluable friend @onthewayout.
If you have not yet joined the #steemitschool Discord, do it now:Discord
For accompanying me, reading me and always being there ... Simply THANKS
Por acompañarme, leerme y estar ahí...
Dark. Gripping. Moving. Real. It's lines like these that keep me reading. You struck a nerve with this one.
I'm glad you touched your fiber, Nicholas. Thanks for the comment.
Me dolió...
Gracias por el acompañamiento empático, Sandra.
A perfect poem zaleira.
Exploring the fate that has been fixed by nature in an ominous way.
Oh, dear poet, for me today it rains sadness, desolation and horror. My country ... Oh, my country! ... I do not know what to say.
Me gustó. Tu forma de manejar el lenguaje... cómo muestras la devastación...
Un saludo!
¡Gracias por leerme! Tu opinión es muy importante para mí.
very nice poem
Gracias por leerme y comentar, @daysiselena.
Gracias por leer y comentar, @antoniarhuiz.
Perfecta descripción que ilustra el sentimiento que nos arropa hoy a todos los venezolanos de bien. Sin embargo, no deja de ser un hermoso poema. Por aquí seguimos, vamos que falta menos!
¡Gracias, Mary!
Poem structured in a single piece of powerful writing in free verse. Describes a great desolation centered on a sad reality. The voice speaks of a destiny with a dubious and gloomy future. At the end of the poem there is a shattered hope, an expression of fatality, of free reign before the negative emotion suffered. Congratulations sister, great poem.
Thank you for such a successful comment, brother!
Good poem, @zeleiracordero amiga