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RE: Poem / Midnight Thoughts

in #poetry7 years ago

I really appreciate all the helpful insight, I'll implement a lot more of it in me poetry... the context of this poem was just some random conversation that a friend and I were having and coincidentally I was also listening to music. The lack of detail is to intrigue the readers and keep them reading. The last stanza is needed, the conversation clearly ends with a reconnection. The last stanza indicates the willingness to wait for a day where the girl and I could be together in real life and not just over a message... I see how the vagueness impacts the full image and will work on it, but not everythig that happens needs to be shared :) I really appreciate you taking the time to help me out as I have not yet attended uni to study further in English literature.

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I'm happy you found value! I understand not mentioning the mundane, or the total sum of all experiences. But context helps create a better image, and therefore makes it more interesting. I ask, "how can you convey the talking with a friend and the willingness to wait for a girl you want for more than just over messages?"

I think the last stanza can deliver the same message, but be written more effectively.

Obscurity and abstraction is not interesting for readers. It is confusing and makes us move on. Writers have to earn interest. I struggle with it constantly. I like reading my own work, but I know all the nuance and subtly that makes me happy to read doesn't make it interesting for my readers.

I see... I'll definitely start working on it, I'll try to infuse more detail in my poems

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