Poetry Slam Challenge 4: Regretful back view on a blatant life (Original Poem)
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Poetry Slam Challenge: Loop Poetry. Rule of @prufarchy's great "Poetry Slam Challenge #4" is that the last word of each sentence must be the first word in the next. Be creative, have fun playing around with words and join!
dirt he never managed to get rid of,
of greed, blood, perfume and lust.
power he abused even as he fell.
Fell into the deepest shallowness of arrogance,
arrogance paired with audacity and structural violence.
Violence led him into a vicious circle,
circle of hate and hating back.
all he wanted, fulfilled were all his needs.
Needs now no more than a warm hand.
Hand reaches out,
out into an emptiness.
Emptiness is all that's there,
there in his last breaths.
Poetry Slam Challenge
This was my "Poetry Slam Challenge 4" entry. You are next!
All images: own work
Wow. A very regretful life. One might ask how did he get there...'Fell into the deepest shallowness of arrogance' says the poem. What is arrogance you ask?
Arrogance is self-justification, self-deception, and self-absorption.
Arrogance's antonym is humility. What is humility? Humility is objectivity and teachability.
Thank you for posting this poem which brought these thoughts to mind.
Hi @bleujay,
That is just wonderful that it triggered thoughts which developed and created further onces. It is lovely to see that. Cheers!
Thank you for your reply. Well done with regards to the poem. If the reader is free to let their thoughts take them where they may and not distracted by either commentary or the poet themselves, it would seem mission accomplished with regard to the authors goals, is it not.
Interesting and well written.
Typo on the second line "of" should be "off". You could just lose that word altogether and start the 3rd line with "Wash off..." and maybe end with a "?" so your context remains the same.
Hi cathi-xx,
Thanks for pointing it out! And even adding possible solutions. That is just wonderful. I questioned if I should really edit it. But I decided to do so. I replaced "wash" with "get rid of". Works nearly as good.
You're very welcome, I liked your poem and I would hate to see anyone lose out due to a tiny error. Most Steemit poetry is god awful, so this was a pleasant surprise.