Thinking Man's Prison (Original)

in #poetry10 years ago

Inside of this cave there is light,
where blurred shapes dance against
a far wall, and color slips silently
across rocky halls.

Here, stories of starry skies
are whispered in frosty breaths
around barely lit fiery pits,
this history that burns.

Memories lie like leaves at dawn
in fall, adhering to the rock strewn floor,
gathered around my ankles,
cushioned in remembering.

Signs and symbols from an outside world,
reflected back against a far wall,
ideas that fill each corner with
thoughts from another cave.

Reaching out these frosty breaths,
forming symbols and requisite signs,
to only touch that outside world,
to only see just one other cave.

Inside of this place there is a life,
where blurry hopes dance against
a far wall, where desperate voices from
other caves call.



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It took me a while to write this comment. Your poem put my mind in a different place.

Excellent work. Thank you for sharing.

I have such an appreciation for your work that I'm truly humbled and grateful that I could put your mind in a different place, for at least a moment. Thank you for sharing your work, I'm very much a fan.

Thank you. That is very nice of you to say that. I'll be looking for your future posts

"stories of starry skies are whispered in frosty breaths" - Beautiful, J.

Thank you very much, J. Your work is simply amazing.

Excellent poem! Your writing has reminded me of Plato's Allegory of the Cave. I really enjoyed the imagery you put to use. The rhythm was splendid and your word choice was perfect for setting your tone.

Thank you for taking the time to share this with our community!

that allegory sticks with you, and it definitely has been a fundamental inspiration for me. Thank you for taking the time to read this and share your feedback, I was very much concentrated on tone with this piece and I'm happy that came through

Brilliant picture to go with it... i think you painted the image so well with your words, its amazing

Thank you, this is such a great compliment coming from an author whose work and style I have much respect for. I'm very glad I could share and I appreciate your feedback.

I like the circular nature of the poem, that the ending joins back to the beginning. Yikes, I just realized I worked my tag into this reply @beginngtoend

Well done, sir. Well done ;)

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