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RE: Life's a Canvas, An Original Poem
From the first stanza, I could tell I was in for a great read! You're quite talented to manage to convey the message in concise lines. I love the message behind the poem: instead of blaming life and playing the victims, we pick up the brush and paint our own story.
If I can comment on anything, it would be that the last line seems a bit too wordy. The cliché in the line before the last could be deleted and instead replaced by half of the last line. Nonetheless, a really great poem!
Hi, thank you for stopping by and giving me great feedback. You're absolutely right about that last line, would make the flow much smoother, thanks. :)
humbled that you actually saw my advice as valuable! It's my pleasure to be a part of this lovely community, where we respect and listen to one another