Downer [original dark short poem]
Black clouds descend like a coven of hawks
Press downward, ever deeper my feet,
Ever steeper, the plunge into her heart.
Always lower, the landing that I seek.
Past nightmares and dreams,
Loud laughter and screams.
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Photo by @negativer
This is so beautiful and sad, @negativer. But mostly beautiful. (Did I mention sad?)
I think that is indeed what I was going for :) Thanks!
I imagined a person standing next to a steep cliff, over looking the dark ocean. They jump off, the poem is their final thoughts as the rocks and waves claim their prize.
This gives me the sads.
Hm. That's dark.
I like it.
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sounds like some nasty divorce.
Ooo. Not the original intent, but certainly would work there too. Thanks for reading :)
Curious as to the original intent. I always feel like there's a layer I'm missing with poetry. Lots of angst on a Monday morning.
Ah, it was weekend angst, but it's from old salt. Poetry is pretty loose, and whatever the reader gets out of it is valid and legitimate.
In general, the vitriol is powered by my bad thoughts from high school days and those lonely, early years in the workforce where I'd be bitter about everyone and their happy lives and families and girlfriends and whatever, and I'd be bitter about what little I had to offer or could bring to a relationship except bad thoughts and darkness, and I had a fear that I would drag her down with me.
Old thoughts though, although I do still have nightmares about high school at times, even 25 years removed.
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Very deep, dark and beautiful writing! Love it!
Thank you so much for reading!
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