TGIF ( Original Spoken Word Poem)steemCreated with Sketch.

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Flagella flinging
stinging bare back
attacked with malice
for the sin of bold benevolence
pestilence afflicted upon sacred skin
beginning the precious process of redemption,
tremendous burden placed upon shoulders shrouded in crimson
carried across crowds calling for carnal consequence
as men of prominence and stature play witness to the rapture
of divinity
obscenities assaulting ears
as tears from women weeping
fall, seeping into the soil
like the royal blood flowing from the crown
the ground colored red from the ransom

the appalling sound of his breathless body
falling down upon death’s hill
dead still until
consciousness comes compelled by pain
of strained muscles whipped into contraction
an earthly reaction from a heavenly portal
as our mortal ways
dim the rays of the sun
and the Son crumbles
stumbling under our yoke
his broken will...
those whips still killing
the redemption still spilling in the sand
when the Cyrenian man
is forced to carry his share and ours
for the one whose scars would not heal,
but reveal the proof that

Life conquers death

his breath,
shallow near the top
as the congregation stops

The Cyrenian’s burden relieved
No longer to be heaved for him
Whose limbs are now seized
And squeezed into place…for securing
Hammers and nails ensuring
Arms to icon affixed
among the convicts he was raised
and praised, in jest
his chest, bare
but his arms, wide
the heavens cried
the spear, in his side.

The path to the throne
was shone
for those who would follow still
willing to spill
their share of the burden


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WOW! okay so gotta be honest, i wasn't sure where it was heading at first. But then you said "Son" and i was like what? and then I realized you were talking about Christ's crucifixion and oh my, that was sooo powerful!!!! I LOVE IT!

Thank you so much for your reply. When I wrote this, I wanted to make a graphic telling of the passion of Christ without using the word Christ, or cross, or Lord. I also wanted it to be sort of shocking which is why I chose a title that could have double meanings (with the hope that the meaning would change after reading the poem). So your reaction is very satisfying to me. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

LOL i just realized the Title haha, i was so engrossed with the poem I forgot about that....yeah, I could tell that and kudos to you! I really really loved it.

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Wow! Powerful piece, and even more so hearing it spoken! Well done. I am a fan!

Thank you so much for taking the time to read, listen and comment. I really appreciate it.

It was my pleasure :)

Wow! Fantastic imagery. Very dark. I like it!

Sorry, not sure how I missed this comment. Thank you for it.

I really really really really love it!

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