You are viewing a single comment's thread from:RE: Dead Poem Society, Round 3, Contest and Community BuildingView the full contextmarlyncabrera (70)in #poetry • 6 years ago Hi ☻ Thanks, @prydefoltz for this amazing idea--and for my share :D Here, my poem: "Take Her"
This is gorgeous, and I also am rereading Memoirs of a Geisha (I had a long train ride and saw it on my shelf), so I've been pretty deep in thought also about what a 'wimp' Ceremoniousness is. Really beautiful, fluid language!! <3
Good read, @kilbride. Indeed, Geishas are a romanticized topic. But there's so much beauty and history involved that we can't help loving it.
and untie the blossoms of your shame,
for business is quick and is done
before it can notice the color of your bosom's
I remember this one. Such gorgeous phrasing and presentation. Brava:)
Make sure you take a moment to look at the work of others and upvote another's work:)
Sure, @prydefoltz. I'm doing it tonight :-)
Great thanks, Marlyn:)
Geisha are an interesting theme, and always bordering on the sad or tragic.
Yes, I think so, @momzillanc. Thanks for giving this piece a second chance :-) It feels good :3
These are my favorite lines. I really enjoyed the final stanza because it did a great job of tying the piece together and delivered a strong punch.