When You Mess Up
When the mess is my fault
The crowd stares at me
The growing pressure
Coming at me
Illuminating
My greedy monster
It lives within me
I’m an imposter
The part of me that
I can’t seem to shake
The wheels keep spinning
Like a dusty remake
But I’m a sprit
A wholesome dancer
Romanticizing
The room enchants her
I am mine
Inside my mind
Diamonds they shine
Just please be kind
Slippery skin
Taste of this grin
Infatuate
Let me come in
He wants to take her
Decimals Break her
Her life awaits her
She thinks they hate her
It feels like a sickness
The mean words echo
Shut out the cruelty
Love me or let go
Rocking and reeling
Stare at the ceiling
His love is lucious
She’s used to kneeling
Feel it sink in like
A sweet slow chagrin
It encapsulates everything
And breaks it in two
It’s you looking back at me like a mirror and it helps me see it helps me believe at least I bleed trust and believe
Daylight starry night
Long flight
Shhhh no more tonight
you sure can write :) i would like to see a poetry for succeeding to :)
Excellent feedback thank you 🙏
Cool juxtaposition of energy here; love/hate, confidence/insecurity, truth/fraud, male/female, night/day, knowing/unknowing, and give/take. The whole piece is sexy AF- including the introductory graphic :)
Thank you @jrb450 I drew her over top of a logo when the company I work for was deciding on layout and design. I was showing them what I saw when we stacked the c’s side by side with the m below. I could only see the c’s as breasts lol.
Hahahaha....you and me both!
I think poetry is not an easy thing, instead of just stories the feeling but the poem has its own provisions in order to be easily understood.
one of them is the comparison images.
cloud equate with foolishness because the same cover.
clouds cover the light.
stupid cover science.
thanks @lorilikes this poem
Nice lines again @lorilikes
I have come up with some lines to about 'sometimes i messed up'
We'll be happy
I'll smile
You'll make jokes
Life will feel worth while
I'll sing
You'll dance
Laughter will ring
Everything will be a new chance
Then I'll trip over a chord
Or say the wrong thing
I'll break the board
Or I'll forget what note to sing
"Ashes, Ashes.
We all fall down."
Sometimes I feel like a screw up
I want to cry but I'm afraid of what you'll think
Sometimes I mess up
I want to scream but I just blink
Beautiful! The blinking part, I understand so much. Just blinking when I want to scream sometimes. ⭐️You are so sweet
Thank you so much @lorilikes.
These days I'm making poem more often because of you.
Thanks for all the motivation
Wow @lorilikes, you wrote this?
They are awesome and
These words just touched my heart
Thanks for sharing
Thank you yes I write all my stuff . Thank you darling.🦋
That’s great then You are an adorable writer
@lorilikes you write very good poems..... It is rightly said that money can't judge the content of a article this can be said for your post.... Really appreciate your writing keep it up its just beginning one odd day you will surely come in trending section I bet
Thank you so much!
Wow awesome poem it really amazing
Wow! great poetry . I really impress to your poem. Its a great mystery . thanks for share
wow really cool ... nice
it beautiful poem thanks for share
