SACRED PLACES {An Original poetry} Day 81
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We have threaded sacred places
Obliterating heavenly symbols
and squabbling un-sonorous sounds
where the celestial bodies converge.
we've brought uncleanness to the tebarnacle
to see the awesome tentacles of miracles
alas! We've met the true death, by selling our abilities to listen.
gagging for life and taken away by the storm
We've threaded sacred places.
opened vaults and holy cases
We've wonderded at the awesomeness of the firmament.
and on our journey to the sun
to see the the holiness of the holies
Our doubts has married our will to live.
We let ignorance relieve us of sanctity
Making us walk the sanctuary of heavens.
With dirty heart, and a rotten soul.
We've threaded sacred places
ran races alone in a lane of unbelief
allowing our gaze into the sunset
making us sea Jesus in his awesome glory.
We are faithless chickens with a bacon heart
doubting the sacrosanct power of the maker
Who has made us dough like our baker.
We've threaded sacred places
buying our way Into everlasting doom.
we're vegetables cursed to die by the soup pot.
standing alone on the face of the executioner
naked and bereft of an Attorney.
We've lived to see the sweetness of death.
but unaware of the voyage after life.
POETIC NOTES & ANALYSIS
Sacred places is a poem that speaks about man's lack of belief in God as the creator of heaven and earth. It's however been a debate that has been unending, and the writer wrote in the perspective of a man and some fellow people who took on a journey to find out about God's existence.
The poem is narrative, and spoke about how they over journeyed and began to see things, feel things and as well as travelled beyond the expectations and limit of man, the writer however went through some out of body experience, like In stanza three where he saw Jesus.
The Poem however paints the fact that the writer and his companion were unclean and could not go beyond the places they have threaded, but because he has seen the signs of the existence of God, he decides to continue and seek further knowing it may cause fatality but it's a risk he's willing to take.
Written, edited & analysed
By @Josediccus
26/5/2018
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JOSEPH C.IKECHUKWU
This is nice, though the language is a bit difficult. A person reading just for pleasure might stop on the way. However, the poem is wonderfully crafted and shows craftsmanship. Well done.