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RE: Augmented Love (Poetry Collaboration on the Blockchain)
What a beauty! My. For one I've been trying so hard to see or get the perfect augumented allusion but here you are spelling it so beautifully, I definitely think the way you describe a process
Pupils swells reflecting shapes
I was thinking it was really going to be a difficult theme to express but my! You manage to weave your way around it, by all means I loved this one, the delivery was top knotch really and you never fail to deliver when it comes to poetry please, I lack confident when it's a video format very ironic when you see I'm a geek on dtube. However this is the killer delivery I felt what you were trying to show me and wow it's generally beautiful. Welldone
Thanks for the feedback mate. It was a difficult theme you gave me for sure and originally I started writing a poem about a guy who was addicted to visiting a software version of his dead wife in a virtual reality environment. I even wrote the first verse but I wasn't happy with it, so I decided to try a different direction.
This poem is much more concrete and complete, and it flowed easier when writing. It's about those first initial months/years of a love affair... where the intensity is like something out of this world, and you wake in the morning and just lie there and stare at the morning and the sun rising as your partner stirs. The whole action of the poem is completely a series of images for that perfect moment.
In my mind, the core image of the chrysalis hints at the nature of an evolving relationship, but also the intense beauty of that initial phase of love, before it evolves into transforms into something different, like the butterfly emerging from the pupal state of the chrysalis.
Thanks again for your thoughtful comment and feedback m8 :)