Captive Water Rhythm - Writing Impact Challenge #1

in #poetry7 years ago

At the edge of a flowing brook
far from the urban cacophony
this is the space where I find myself
in the captive water rhythm.

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I set my back against a rock
enjoying natures symphony
An audience of one am I
to the captive water rhythm.

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Sunlight dancers shimmering
on the liquid stage of the stream
they follow the music gracefully
of the captive water rhythm.

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The breeze is blowing delicate
playing the leaves in the trees
a complementary accompaniment
with the captive water rhythm.

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This is my very special place
embraced by the tranquil sublime
I become one with natures beauty
and the captive water rhythm.



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Nice entry! The fourth stanza's "With the captive water symphony" felt a tiny bit awkward to me but the last stanza's one flowed beautifully!
Thank you for your words

I feel the tranquility of this piece and I can visualize the waters slowly flowing downstream. Very good use of the words chosen for this challenge. Thank You for your entry. @japhofin8or

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