I appreciate your honesty. I wrote this poem a long while ago (6-7 years), and like to think that my writing has improved since. I am a believer in 'less is more' when writing, the reader (usually) will conjure a scene in order to fill the ambiguity left by the writer. In this particular poem, it was an ill-begotten attempt at designing the atmosphere surrounding this peak. The next three poems I am to release are far more metaphorical, complex, and offer vivid imigary for the reader - I think. :)