Fiery Word Might
cells garnering, creating
realities beyond what a mind fathoms
worlds assembling, wondering
Flung and scattered across the grass
Never taken back however meticulously swept
Irreparable, the tiny pieces, soil-kept
Broken swords
Bear God’s might
Speed of light
The need for words, understated
Come with me to a world where lips build castles
As they fall of the mouth
Into a sea of possibilities
Come with me to a place where
words crash, house of cards
shattered shards
Broken swords
Bear God’s might
Speed of light
The need for words, understated
With love,
@ajremy (the teen with steam for steam)
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This is a really good piece two little things though I feel like the first stanza should be a poem in itself, it is really exquisite and feels finished right there. The rest is nice but feels different in tone and burns slower. So basically after
Starts poem number 2.
which I feel is the weaker of the two - this first part however really is beautiful :)
The second thing may I suggest that you do not break up your pieces with images it really kicks the reader out of the piece.
Yes... I see your observation there and I have to say you're quite right about all you said... even I felt the same way before posting
But I did it this way because I was trying to achieve a "song-like" thing with verses and chorus
nods
I'm so glad you reached out to me on Discord, I did really need to come by and check your blog. You're a great writer I really enjoy your work. I hope to see you sometime in class, but even if I don't I'm going to be checking in a lot more. Have a good one. 😎
Thanks a lot sir.. I'm currently at the university with little time on my hands to spare but I'll try to make it to class once in a while
This is really fiery boss I think I got alot to learn...
Thanks bro... your nice words of encouragement really endows me with the fortitude to persevere
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I really like this poem - it has power in its "words" ... well done! :)
Thanks ma'am.... it's always an honour getting compliments from you
This is really beautiful Remy....
It's going to leave you wondering what the heck you're talking about.
It has an undertone which is almost difficult to decipher.....
You have a rare gift with words Remy....
Cheers
Hmmmn... Thanks Julie....
It's open to interpretation but I was generally talking about the creative and destructive powers of words. .
Hehe..