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RE: Poetic-surge Poetry Contest #1 (Empty Heart)
These are the best lines of the piece in my opinion :) >
There is something she finds
A short flame bound to make her happy
until she sees the stars
It is strange but in the first two parts it seemed to be that she was the one getting bored then the tone shifts and she is the one that always is abandoned. The weaker woman is a sad defeated character. I feel as if she had remained the stronger , flightier one and then had noticed that it was not the failings of the men but her own it would have bene more consistant . But then it is your work so never mind the critics ;)
I get what you are saying and the funny thing is that for me the flame, the guy, was just her way not to think about her problems. Like a distraction that made her "happy" while it lasted. But re reading it through your eyes it makes sense.
Mabye that's the beauty of poetry, being able to find something new every time you read it.
By the way, thanks for the honest comment!
you're so welcome love :)