Open Mic Songwriters Challenge Week 4 - Because We Can - ''La Rueda'' Original Song
Hello Steemit !
One more week , one more song . This challenge keeps me writing and that really makes me happy ,I hope I can get all 8 songs done :) . Thanks to @meno and @luzcypher once again for setting this up !
This week's theme ''Because We Can'' had me really thinking , because the most obvious thing would be some uplifting song on overcoming a goal or something along those lines .. but I actually found a deeper meaning in this phrase. And not such a happy one . There is really a limit on what we can reach .. and are we really doing it for ourselves?.
With these thoughts on my mind I wrote this song called ''La rueda'' , that translates to ''The Wheel" . Quite a simple title but it builds on the idea of those who have fought and fallen for their dreams just to push this wheel of life a little further. Pushing it for the next ones that will come. The memories and ideals of the ones that fell behind will be the strength of the ones that will keep on turning that same wheel. Big changes and dreams are not done by one person but by generations that carry the same ideal.
We push this wheel just because we can , but maybe we are just doing it for the next ones to come , maybe they'll be the ones that arrive.
Hope you like it :)
(P.Mena)
Los labios secos
quebrando el viento
La frente en alta
Una voz se levanta
Se viste de sol
Habla el tiempo
''No hay desierto
Nos sobra el odio''
El cielo tiñe de rojo
detiene el reloj
Escribiendo en arena
''La vida es una rueda''
No nos callamos
nos transformamos
Vivimos en tus ojos
Las dunas llevan
su sufrimiento
que muere lento
la tierra une las sombras
de quien somos hoy
Here's a translation:
(P.Mena)
Dry lips
Breaking the wind
Head up high
A voice wakes up
and dresses like a sun
Time speaks to us
''There is no desert
we have too much hate''
Sky then dyes in red
and the clock stops
Writing in sand
''Life is just a Wheel''
We don't shut up
we just transform
we live in your eyes
Dunes that carry
their suffering
that slowly dies
Land then joins the shadows
that makes us who we are today
These metaphors are quite hard to translate to english... but I did my best :p . Hope the meaning is not lost .
Once again , thanks for reading and listening !
Signing off
Pechiche Mena
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This is beautiful, Pechiche! I really like your way of thinking, and how you introduce us to your thought-process in approaching various themes’s presented to you – it’s truly brilliant.
Thank you very much my brother! Once again you always have something nice to say :). I do my best to explain the 'why' of the song since I don't want it to get lost in the translation. This contest is bringing out new music (not just mine) that is very rewarding ! Cheers!
Que bien ! Eres un poeta.. de hecho noto mucho en tus canciones que hay muchas metáforas en ellas. Es algo hermoso.. mi estilo no es igual.. soy mas de cosas directas jaja ... y justo pensando rn eso de que lo mas pbvio era escribir algo motivador... pensé que iba a encontrar más canciones así.. pero por el contrario todos los que he escuchado han ido en otro camino . Que interesante. Esa es la belleza de open mic y del songwriters challenge.
Oye, aprovecho para decirte que te hé mencionado en mi mas reciente post , por si quieres leerlo.
Un abrazotote!
Muchas gracias kat ! me alegro que te guste, ultimamente me encuentro escribiendo muchas metaforas , aunque en temas mas viejos manejaba un estilo mas directo de escritura , supongo que son etapas ! Y esta muy bien que cada cual tenga su estilo , uno de mis letristas favoritos y compositores es Ruben Blades y el habla casi que completamente en prosa , te va contando historias con palabras comunes en muchas de sus canciones y me parece genial!
Ahora chequeo tu post :) . Un gran abrazo !
Claro Rubén Blades increíble!!! A mi también me encanta!!! El es verdaderamente un “Story teller” bastante admirable!!!
A mi me gustan las metáforas porque te hacen pensar y eso es algo muy bonito.
Un abrazote!
Awesome sir as always..
thank you very much @g10a ! I'm very glad you liked it my friend! cheers!
What a beautiful song you wrote. Really good. Thank you.
Thank you very much @luzcypher , this contest is bringing out new music out of me and that is very rewarding :) . I've had writers block for quite a while and to be able to pull out new songs is very refreshing , even if they are in this raw state , so i'm winning big time here :) . Cheers!
You have a great voice man, and those chords you're using make my inner jazz nerd feel all tingly :D
Thank you very much @ausxen ! I really appreciate your comment , and yep I can't help using some ''jazzy'' chords in my music , I really like the color they bring in :) . Cheers!
Of course dude. Looking forward to hearing more of your stuff.
This sounds really good as usual for you man \m/
Thank you very much my friend \m/
Me encantó tu voz! Espero sigas concursando las próximas semanas, aquí te dejo nuestra participación :) https://steemit.com/openmic/@miguelarl/openmic-songwriters-week-3-because-we-can-escapar-la-nina-ingravida
Muchas gracias! Que bueno que tambien Estes participando! Un Gran abrazo!
wonderful imagery as ever :) x
Thank you my friend ! Cheers!
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