Open mic week #70 - Original song - En vano/In vain (with translated lyrics)

in #openmic6 years ago (edited)

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Hello Steemians!

This is my entry for Steemit's Open mic week # 70!

Here are the lyrics, both is spanish and in english:

En vano

Desvelo
en vano

Se derrite el aire
nos cubre la sombra
refugio recuerdos
falsos...

Sin miedo
discreto

Recuerdo la llave
se cierra la puerta
me aferro a momentos
amargos...

Momentos amargos...

Tal vez
nunca sanará
no regresará

Tal vez
me derrotará
me consumirá...

Mas lento
Incierto

Rompe las postales
borrando la sombra
destruye recuerdos
plásticos...

Momentos plásticos...

Tal vez
nunca sanará
no regresará

Tal vez
me derrotará
me consumirá...

Y cuando sienta el reflejo frente a la pared
y cuando evite el recuerdo sin saber por qué
y si derramo mil copas buscando otra piel
y cuando escuche ya no habra nada...

Tal vez
me derrotará
no regresará

tal vez
me derrotará
me consumirá...


In vain

Sleepless
in vain

The air melts
shadow covers us
I shelter fake memories

Fearless
discrete

I recall the key
the door closes
I hang onto bitter moments

Bitter moments

Perhaps
It won't ever heal
it will not come back

Perhaps
it will break me
it will consume me

Slower
Uncertain

Tearing the post cards
erasing the shadow
destroying plastic memories

Plastic moments

Perhaps
It won't ever heal
it will not come back

Perhaps
it will break me
it will consume me

And when I feel the reflection against the wall
and when I avoid the memory without knowing why
and if I spill a thousand cups in search of another skin
and when I listen there will be nothing...

Perhaps
It will brake me
it will not come back

Perhaps
it will break me
it will consume me...

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This is an original song I wrote about a month before I knew about the existence of this great platform and community,
It's insane to me to think that I've been participating for 9 weeks now!

I wrote it in Spanish as you can see, The day I wrote it I had decided to challenge myself to start it and finish it in one go, without breaks. I've always had real trouble writing songs in Spanish, even though I'm a native Spanish speaker, most of my life I've listened to music in english, and so It's way easier for me to do that in English. I had left this song saved up in my archives because I didn't what to do with it, to be honest.

Now that the songwriters challenge is over, I feel I now have the chops to take many of my old song ideas and finish them into full songs, not only lyrically but melodically as well, and I've gotten soooo much better at guitar through hard work these past 8 weeks that I feel I can even play them live by myself, which didn't feel possible just two months ago!

I hope you enjoy this song, I am really proud of it, it feels like a great accomplishment to me :)


Esta es una canción original que escribi casi un mes antes de saber de la existencia de esta gran plataforma y comunidad, ¡Es muy loco para mi pensar que he estado participando por 9 semanas ya!

La escribí en español como pueden ver, el día que la escribí decidí darme a mi mismo un reto, comenzarla y terminarla en un solo tirón, sin descansos. Siempre he tenido gran dificultad al escribir canciones en español, aunque soy hispano-hablante de nacimiento, casi toda mi vida he escuchando música en Inglés, así que siempre me fue mas fácil en inglés. La había archivado por que no sabia que hacer con ella, para ser honesto.

Ahora que terminó el Songwriters challenge, siento que tengo la habilidad de tomar mis viejas ideas de canciones y terminarlas, no solo líricamente sino también melódicamente, y mejore taaaanto en la guitarra con trabajo duro en estas 8 semanas que siento que incluso puedo tocarlas en vivo por mi cuenta, cosa que se sentía imposible hace dos meses!

Ojalá la disfruten, estoy muy orgulloso de ella, ¡se siente como un gran logro para mi!! :)


Thank you very much to @luzcypher and , @soundlegion, @krystle, @verbal-d, and @passion-ground, you guys rock!

Also @ausbitbank and @xedal and @pfunk for their generosity!

Also to everyone who shared and commented and upvoted any of my posts! :)

Thank you for reading and watching!

Til' my next post!

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Increíble hermano, qué gran talento.

Hey brother!, muchas gracias! :)

great job Luis, really terrific song. you also have a great voice, though I believe I've already told you that a few times! lol :)

Hey @alexpmorris! thank you very much!, I'm glad you liked it!
You have told me that a few times before, yes, but I don't mind it ;) hehe

muy bonita la canción Luis!!! =)

Hola @evecab!
Muchas gracias! :) me alegra mucho que te haya gustado! :D

pffff, temazo, muy buena interpretación ! te felicito !

Hehehe gracias Ale!! :D

💜💜 Niiice

:D Gracias Car!!! 💜💜💜💜

every time just awesome!! simply awesome. huge fan all day

Hey @soundlegion! thank you so much!! I can say the same about you! Huge fan all day as well! :)
I'm really glad you enjoyed it hehe

Very nice song, I read along the English version while listening. And I really like the guitar arrangement it gives a eerie feel to the song.

Hello @geenaizzy!
Thank you very much!, I feel the same about the guitar arrangement!! :)

Awesome dude! Bravo!

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Thank you very much good sir! :) I'm really happy you liked it!!

Ahh... more quintessential, Luis! I love that you did this in your native language! The "passion" simply went through the roof in the latter half of the song! Awesome, brother!

Hey brother!! hahaha, thank you so much! I did my best on the lyrics! even though It's really difficult for me to write something I actually like in spanish hehe, so this makes me doubly happy! :D

Beautiful song Luis, i love the depth of that reverb, really gives a lush sound, but aside form this vocals are tops!

Hey @kryptoe! Thank you so much!, I like that reverb as well :)
It makes me really happy you liked it! :)

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