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RE: Steemit Open Mic Songwriters Challenge Week 7 - Our (Original song)
I like the way the lyrics and melody are echoed by the guitar at first, moving along in a gentle, stately progression until you come to the coda, where the strumming comes in and it sounds epic. May I offer one (hopefully constructive) critical comment? I would have liked to hear you stay in the coda for a little while longer, letting that strumming and those final lines "Find, find/Our right place, our right time" build and crescendo a little bit before trailing off. I felt like the song was building to that point and it deserved more play. But that's just my take, I could be way off. Loved the song structure in general, performance, and lyrics. Great song :) Following.
Thanks for your comments, I kind of feel the same around that final moment, it deserved more space, I kind of did the song in a hurry because I have literally a few hours before the contest closed so I didn't worked as much as I like to...
But I'm glad you liked the song, really encourages me to keep doing it, I follow you back !
I totally know what that's like! Both of my most recent entries were written and recorded in like two days, I barely had any time to practice them... consequently parts of the arrangements felt a little bit slapped together to me. I have to go back to them later and see if I think they need more work or not. Anyway, really like what you're doing and looking forward to hearing more!