Một con người lương thiện trên đất MẸ VIỆT NAM !!! :))

kelvin2002 (25)in #nhatho • 6 years ago (edited)

                                          KIẾP LỮ HÀNH

                              Con Thuyền nhỏ ra khơi cùng Sóng lớn
                              Bão bập bùng quyết chí vượt ra khơi
                              Đêm giã bay Ngày đầm, hai giác giã
                              Kiếp Phong trần sóng gió phủ đời trai !

***Sau đây là nhận xét của bản thân mình về bài văn :
Bài văn được mình viết ra trong khoảng thời gian lênh đênh trên biển khơi ,đang bị gió bão mọi vật vây quoanh toàn là sóng biển và sóng biển ,cái cảm giác nhớ đất liền nhớ cái nhộn nhịp của Thị xã LaGi không sầm uất cũng không quá tể nhạt .
Tuy mình là dân biển nhưng không có thích đi biển mà gặp cảnh mưa bão này nữa nên thấy tủi lòng .
Bài thơ này tuy ngắn chỉ có 4 câu,nhưng có 2 vé đối và 5 từ đối rất rõ ràng đó là :
Thuyền nhỏ >< Sóng lớn
Đêm giã bay >< Ngày giã đầm (ngày đầm) và
Bão bập bùng ( ngoài biển) >< Kiếp Phong trần (hay dùng để nói danh sĩ khiêu bạc giang hồ trên đất liền ) !!!

Mình học thức còn hạn hẹp ,văn hay chữ đẹp mình không có nhiều nên rất mong được những lời nhận xét và đóng góp của tất cả mọi người .
Gửi lời cảm ơn chân thành đến tất cả các bạn đọc cho bài viết '' Đầu Tay " của mình ! <3
............................................... THE AND .....................................................

#poetry #vn-contest #vnpoetry #life

6 years ago in #nhatho by kelvin2002 (25)

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kelvin2002 (25) 6 years ago

Muốn được làm quen với mọi người con đang trong ruổi ngoài đất MẸ VIỆT NAM ! cùng nhau làm thơ tâm sự đời .

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kelvin2002 (25) 6 years ago

thank you sir !!!

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