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RE: Discipline, Fearlessness, And Other Lies Sold To You By Clever Marketers
you are welcome
A trick to I like to use when writing is to imagine myself speaking what I write as a speech. Every dot (.) is an actual stop. Every paragraph end is a pause, in which I catch my breath. I write in a way that you'd be able to pronounce everything written without running out of breathe, or sounding awkward, because of too many pauses. In your case it would have been the later.
One can even experiment with that concept, and play around with commas, and ellipses (triple dot) when trying to imitate some sort of thought process.
...or maybe you shouldn't do that
...I don't know
...but this is how it looks when I do it.