The Knitrias Project | Short Story Contest! | pious man, by @muftii

in Knitrias Project4 years ago (edited)

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Next to Mount Bakong, there is a clear river like transparent glass when seen from the eyes, colorful small stones add to the beauty of the river, and cold water as if it were in the North Pole, there lived a pious man who had a daily job selling pottery.

One day he toured the village selling his wares, shouting, "Buy pottery, let's buy anyone who wants," the man's voice grew louder for his customers to hear. On the way, he was intercepted by a middle-aged woman. The woman said to him, "Let's stop by my house first and go inside, then I will buy all the things you have brought."

Without thinking, the man entered the middle-aged woman's house. When he was inside, the woman locked the door, and forced the man to serve and satisfy his lust. The man was very surprised, his body trembled and filled with sweat. Then the man said: "I want water for purification."

After completing purification, the righteous then ran to the second floor of the house looking for a window and dropped down, ignoring the loss of life and merchandise he left at home. Suddenly an angel came to hold the man's body with his soft wings until he arrived safely on the ground. Finally the pious man returned to his house empty-handed and full of fear, then he told the incident to his wife.

His wife said: "Kanda, although today we can withstand hunger, we must be grateful because Kanda has avoided that heinous act. Tonight we use our time to worship alone. But our neighbors are accustomed to taking fire from our kitchen every night, if he not seeing the two of us, so he thought we were in a difficult situation. "So his wife immediately went to the kitchen and lit a fire then returned to the room.

Not long after the old woman came to take the fire from her kitchen, said: "O good people, hurry and take your bread from the stove, otherwise the bread will burn!"

The man's wife came out and saw that on the stove there was a pan filled with bread. So they ate joyfully while asking God to give them sustenance without having to work anymore. Suddenly they fell in front of them diamond jewels from above Pian. They were very happy.

Late at night they went to sleep, his wife slept very soundly and dreamed as if he was in heaven. There he saw the pulpit of those who were experts in observing the world in a very beautiful way. Only the pulpit belonging to her husband saw that some gems were missing. After awakening from sleep, he then told his dream to her husband. They then prayed that the jewel be returned to its place. Then immediately, the jewel vanished before them.

Steps, fortune, meeting, and death have been determined by the ruling god, we as humans must try and be patient if our ideals are not in accordance with what we want.

We expect wealth, but destiny determines us to be poor. Remember! Rizki is important to flow, large and small that is important to have flow. Do not expect to flow like a flood, if you can not swim can sink. Until when you are busy with wealth, while you will be asked about everything you do. That is extraordinary advice in this story.


hi friend steemean, if you are interested in this contest, see the post @rashia, Knitrias Project Initiative: Short Story Contest! (33 Steem reward pool)


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You have created a great story @Muftii! Sorry that I did not react to it so far. I have a few things going on in my private life at the moment... But I am catching up now :P

I will have to discuss with my other judge @Leveuf though, because your story only has 472 words, which is under the minimum...

I will check the other contributions and then discuss how to deal with this matter.

hi @rashia,
what's up, are you okay?
I hope your problem is quickly resolved. a big hug for you

Thankies. Please check out the comment i mentioned you in. You still have time until the deadline of the contest.

Multiple issues came up don't worry i will be fine 😊🥰 but thanks for caring ❤

already repaired.
A tight hug for you my friend

Awesome thank you

But still no open ending, an open ending means, the story could be continued

@Muftii the deadline is in 5 hours, there is still no open ending. You added more words and gave important advice at the end, but that closed the story. Please change it to have an open ending that would allow the reader to wonder how it would continue.

Otherwise i cannot count this as valid entry >_<

the purpose of open endings is not a story can be understood by the reader, who can open his insight / inspiration as a result of the story being read.
or maybe a serialized story that you meant ... ??

 4 years ago (edited)

An open end put simply means the story can be continued.

I'm sorry @Muftii, you put so much effort into it, but sadly it violates the rule of an open end... :(

Congratulations on being the first participant on the contest!!
Great work, @Muftii!!

hi @knitrias, thank you for your support. Good luck. is there a hug tonight🤗

Very nice story, I like how it intertwines various themes and you think of a full continuity full of reflection.

Good luck in the contest!

thank you friends for your support, have fun

Where is the open ending?

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