Hi @udobliss. I think you could be benefitted from a few changes and improvements:

• Learn to use Markdown Editing to enhance the readability of your post. If you're not familiar with Markdown Editing, click here to find out more.
• Cite your article's reference
• Put some images and cite their sources.

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