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RE: Mizu No Oto - Every Image Has Its Haiku - Edition #35 (English)
Hi Marco,
I'm not in the mood for the city, as my haiku will show :)I just looked at you syllable count. I thought 5/7/5 was classic haiku. However, if that is not right, the second version will serve. This has the 3/5/3 count. Same sense, less words :)
Dissonance. Bustle.
Red. White. Black. Grey. The city.
Flowers blossom---where?
Dissonance
White. Grey. The City.
Flowers--Where?
Enjoyed your haiku @agmoore. Had to go back and look at the picture to find all the colors. Yes, the city void of nature.
Nice to see you here, @cyemela. Always a good day when you stop by.
I also prefer the second one: it contains everything you said with the first, but in a more economical and simpler way.
I'm a bit sorry for the fact that the city triggers negative reactions in you, but I accept it.
While I was born in a hospital :), the next eleven years were spent in the shadow of a forest. The city was a shock. I think as I get older, the early impressions prevail. Nature is my comfort zone.
@agmoore, your haiku is very city. I really like the way you choose to write the second one.
Thanks. Yeah, I like the second one better too.
I thought 5-7-5 was classic too. Like the first version and second 💕
Thank you!