Day 81: 5 Minute Freewrite - Prompt: I floss my tears
I stand here clothed
Yet as naked and bare
Dwindling down the spiral of doubt
Like a falling star escaping into despair
I ask myself questions that
I refuse to answer
I deny myself the truth
And immerse my fate in laughter
Sitting in silence
Listening to the surrounding nothing
The walls cave in
While I floss my tears
I go to my friends for hope
But all I get are fake cheers
I get overwhelmed in loneliness
As I converse among friends
Seeking for a shred of proof
As my seclusion begins
I drink among strangers
To achieve a certain high
I have destroyed myself with anger
And that’s the end of me...bye!
If you liked what I wrote, please read some of my other stuff and comment.
Thanks!
This prompt was from @mariannewest
It's like a song… I can hear it! :D
Well done! It's interesting how we had a completely different take on the prompt…
Thank you, I think for some reason I always have a melody in the back of my head and then I write to the tune of it. Now if I only knew how to compose, I'd make a record. If only, any suggestions?
You turned this into a poem that absolutely touches the reader. If you like help and feedback for your work, please join the Isle of Write - the discord I mention in every prompt. There, beside the freewriter room, you also find a poetry space.
Many there are experienced writers and are happy to give feedback.
Thank you so much. I am humbled truly. Thank you for the prompt inspirations, it has proven to be very conducive to getting my poetic fluids going. I'll check out the Isle of Write. Thanks again.
Welcome :)
I can empathise with this and many other passages. You're talented and sensitive. Keep up the excellent freewriting !
Thank you, It is much appreciated. Today has been one of those days and thanks to Steemit, it works as a type of Therapy. I am hooked. I think its the duality in us all, the never ending battle of self.
Writing is always cathartic and a good therapy.. way cheaper than a session and with steemit you even gain ..what more? 😉 Self.. we should forget a bit about It sometimes..
Very true indeed, easy on the pocket and I feel that we gain more.
Beautiful! I think most have been there before.
Thank you, sometimes I feel like these places are more and more frequent than I would like.
I understand... Sometimes its hard to see the beauty in life with the weight of our emotions bearing down on our shoulders. I wish you peace! :)
Thank you, I too wish you peace.
Thank you!
Wow. This hit close to home.
I'm glad that you were able to relate, I feel like a part of us all relates to this to an extent.
I agree with @wido, this is like a song! Very nice freewrite.
Thanks, any musicians here that want to make it a song?
I think it could work well as a rap; it flows really well. Unfortunately I have no talents in that arena!
Here's the link for freewrite 82:
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-82-5-minute-freewrite-prompt-stetson
I say we find someone that would be willing to rap it. hah. @alao any suggestions?