Milk - A 5 minute freewrite story

in #freewrite7 years ago

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The milk fell on the bowl like dancing, twirling through the sides before settling in the bottom. Pure. Safe. Pristine.

“Milk before cereal.” She said, sitting across him. All messy hair and heavy eyes. “I knew something had to be wrong with you.” She added. And he knew.

He knew right there that he could show his weirdness to her. He knew his walls would melt, like the butter on her toast. He knew he wouldn’t mind his heart broken by her. He basked in the fear of hurt. Of pain. Even if it was to be excruciating, he would take it. Even that couldn’t be worse than the emptiness of a heart never before shared. The cold perfection of a soul never touched. He was mesmerized.

The milk spilled.


Yeah... the photo has nothing to do with the story. Wanted to capture the salty-sweet whiteness of the milk... but I have none. Cries over the not spilled milk. Anyway, this one sounds to me a little chiché, that wasn't my intention. Still, it kinda worked out. I hope you like it!

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Why cry over spilt milk?
XD
I love this! It somehow wraps up an insane amount of doubt and existential hurt in a scene where a guy does something a tad off.
Ugh.
I'm gonna go cry now, brb.

Spilt?? And here I thought 'spilled' was right. I'll edit that. Ugh, English is hard.

Milk before cereal is more than a tad off. Is plain wrong imo (jk). Now what I can't see is why you'd go cry! Was the story that bad?

Thanks for your comment :)

Oh, spilled is fine! Spilt is the UK version (but yeah, I'm American) and the American version is spilled.

The story wasn't bad! No, it just made me think of my own life and stuff. Yucky personal stuff, like having a partner who sees the smallest fault in you and decides, after two months, to toss you out with the old bath water.
That's all. :'D

rose beutifull i like

Very much enjoyed reading this post.

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