Daily freewrite prompt - 600 bottles of beer on the wall
I don't know if this disqualifies me, but I read the prompt this morning and my mind was blank, so I went out in the scorching heat to move a goat fence through really tall grass, and while I was sweating and swearing and sneezing (I'm allergic to grass) the idea for this freewrite came to me. So I really kind of composed it ahead of time and then wrote it down once the heatstroke had passed. See, @carolkean, I'm not really Don DeLillo. He would never put up with this kind of crap! I did, however, strictly adhere to the five minute limit. Hence only the one paragraph.
600 Bottles of Beer on the Wall
I'm looking at the shelves that used to hold your books, and I'm counting the bottles. I'm up to 600 now. I stopped drinking beer when you left, but I buy one every time I think of you. I was riffing off the thing Kenneth Patchen said. You remember, I'm sure. “I smoke too much. I light a cigarette every time I want to touch someone.” I hope you have fulfilled your promise to “find your bliss” with that tart from accounts payable. You are hoping to find your bliss with an accountant? Was I really that boring? I miss your books, though. The shelves just looked so empty, and I thought if I filled them with something that reminded me of you the pain would dissipate, but it doesn't seem to have worked so well. I guess it doesn't matter in the end. When you left, I started drinking wine.
Excellent freewrite! I hope you were able to get that goat fence set up correctly with a minimum of allergic reactions. Thank you for sharing your interesting story.
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Thank you! I did manage to get it set up before I passed out and dried up. At least the goats were happy!
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You confess (as if it were a crime) that you read the freewrite prompt, went outside to do some grueling chores, let your mind roam free (as in freewrite!) while sweating and swearing and sneezing and moving a goat fence through tall grass. And in that time, the idea for the freewrite formed in your mind. Let me assure you, composing a story in your head is never the same as putting it down in writing. Without fail, the story changes as I start writing. Maybe you didn't experience that, but I always do. Rarely does a scene or a dialogue form in my head and get transferred to paper (computer screen) without morphing into something else. So, you are
Not Guilty
But now you've exposed my own dirty little secret. sigh
And now to the story. I love that wine bottle label!!! "Handsome Devil"
And I love the irony of being dumped for an accountant - so much for the stereotype of the dull number-cruncher? Maybe the narrator was too exciting for a guy with hundreds of books. :) I love the idea of filling that shelf with something to make it look less empty, and filling it with empty wine bottles (or was it beer?) instead. Fill the emptiness with more emptiness. You really do have a gift! Your prose is flawless and witty. (Love the cigarette smokerquote!) You pack so much into a small paragraph. You're right about Don DeLillo and the goat fence, I'm sure, but you have totally captured a Muse, probably from all those hours of "mindless" physical labor and being surrounded by goats, surely the most hilarious creatures in the animal kingdom. Thank you for rising to the challenge of freewriting. You have exceeded my expectations to the point that I have to fight being jealous rather than inspired!
Thanks, Carol! The mindless labor does help somewhat, although I was so hot yesterday that everything melted in my brain like a box of crayons left on the radiator. I'm surprised it came back to me at all!
That Kenneth Patchen quote has always been a favorite. Such a sad, lonely little sentence that says so much. I threw the accountant in there to keep it from being too maudlin. I could have stretched it out a little if I had gone longer than five minutes, but I find I'm liking the strictures of the time limit. It forces me to be pithy and not run on until the concept is watered down and lost. And although I've never written fiction until now, I'm liking the freedom to make stuff up! My blog is all facts, even if I swerve into hyperbole on occasion for effect.
Thank you for being so supportive!
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I like how you used the prompt to describe someone’s pain at loss of love.
Awesome label on the wine bottle.
Thank you! Someone gave me that wine as a thank you for doctoring their baby goat. I don't know where it came from.
That was a fun prompt. The Monday and Tuesday ones I just sat and came up with nothing!
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Hello....!!!!
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@goat-girlz
🍷🍷Fantastic.... Freewrite...!!!
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Thank you! I just started trying them. They're pretty fun!
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#freewrite time Thursdays prompt!
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-601-5-minute-freewrite-thursday-prompt-tax
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Is that a hint? :)
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So, you have become a alcoholic!!
Or they are just wine bottle with water instead?!
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Hahahaha! No, I think I will try to avoid alcoholism!
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Put that wine in the refri, is too hot... lets drink that cold!
Summer is not the best time for wine! It's way too hot!
eh... wine slushie? hehehehe
Why didn't I think of that? I wonder if it would work? Hmmmm. I better try it. Just for science!
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That's the spirit! Is all for the love of science! :D