It seems good @cryptopie. What I normally do aside from what you have mentioned, is to add lemon or calamansi. If you will be using lemon, don't forget to grate some skin of it to the marinade. It healthy, so don't worry, as lemon skin is good for detoxifying.
Be carefull with oil though, oil is not good while you are still in dialysis. My father has undergone dialysis too and he sometimes hard time breathing when consumes too much oil and fat. And get rid a bit of the skin, though I know it's the best part.. keep healthy my friend. 👍