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RE: From "Ragnarok Conspiracy"; Part One, Chapter 7 (draft)
Finally for this chapter, the obligatory comment on the lack of quotation marks around spoken dialogue. Conversation begins with the 3 paragraphs immediately following the ones that I recommended merging together, and with the lone exception of the "It's cocoa!" line near the end of the chapter, those necessary quotation marks aren't anywhere to be found.