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RE: From "Ragnarok Conspiracy"; Part One, Chapter 5 (draft)
My final comment for this chapter is something that I'll likely be stating over and over again as I go through reviewing this book: quotation marks are needed to surround conversations, dialogues, and any other speaking parts in a story. Just like in previous chapters, those quotation marks are missing from just about everywhere that they need to be used.