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RE: From "Ragnarok Conspiracy"; Part One, Chapter 5 (draft)

in #flashfiction7 years ago

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That is a stupid white-mans analogy Rachella, Shirley had responded. You know perfectly well that is not how domino is played. You need to come home soon Rachella, before you turn into a makamba pretu. He was a hero to our people Rachella, and what you started makes you a hero too in my eyes. Hell, they should put up a statue for you in Punda as well as far as I'm concerned.

Corrected paragraph:
"That is a stupid white man's analogy, Rachella," Shirley had responded. "You know perfectly well that is not how dominoes is played. You need to come home soon, Rachella, before you turn into a makamba pretu. He was a hero to our people, Rachella, and what you started makes you a hero too in my eyes. Hell, they should put up a statue for you in Punda as well, as far as I'm concerned."

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