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RE: From "Ragnarok Conspiracy"; Part One, Chapter 4 (draft)
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Yes their son had died and he hadn't been there for Ella in the months after Magnus's fatal car accident, aways on a series of society chores, but compared to his mentor, at least he had been there.
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Yes, their son had died, and he hadn't been there for Ella in the months after Magnus's fatal car accident, away on a series of society chores, but compared to his mentor, at least he had been there.