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RE: Finish The Story Contest - Week #67!
Objection sustained. I am already writing the continuation. So, maintain the condition of red alert )))
Questions:
When you say, "Crane" do you mean the bird or a machine that lifts and lower materials?
What did the nurse look at the parking lot?
The attendant loomed from behind the doctor's silhouette
Is this guy the same cynical male nurse that looked at the parking lot or a different character?
Why is the nurse man and there are no women in the hospital? Isn't it because the hospital is run by a male chauvinistic pig; the protege of white supremacy and patriarchate?
Oh it's Q&A time.. I like it!
In order to avoid switching to an omniscient narrator, I'll resist the temptation and reply through the mouth, eyes and mind of Ms White.
Crane the machine, being the guy's movements quite mechanic.
I don't know. Peraphs, for the little I can see from this bed, he seemed that he wanted to be elsewhere.
Yup. Same person.
Nice one! No apparent reason but what you suggested could be part of your second half (there's some Freudian blurb I could add on the nurse and doctor's roles but better to not open the Pandora's box).
Hope Ms White clarified the doubts a bit 😉 Ah, thank you for helping @phil-glaz with the translation, that was awesome!
Thank you! I will build on that. @phil-glaz's writing was easy to translate. To translate your super imaginative writing to Russian took some sweating effort. )))