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RE: Sharp Clouds in Eden (Finish The Story Entry)
The rhythm! the rhythm, the space of every element of the scene: the dialogue, the return, the shot of warning, the description of the fatal blow ... everything is perfect! There is also a lyricism in your writing that makes us feel stronger the emotions. And the subtext lets us imagine things without you describing them too openly: the link between Musashi and Kalliska, the one between Kalliska and the original Heitor, who died for whom "devastation", the unveiling of secrets ... beautiful, beautiful!
<3 ohhhhh thank you so very very much <3 ohhh I am all emotional now lol, i feel like i have learnt so much from so many people in our wonderful group and I always used to read the stories in awe of how the use of subtext, the ablility to create emotion in so few words, so for you to say exactly that, ohhhh, thank you <3