Jeesus! This is hard for me.
I felt like when I tried to read my first accounting exam in college. It was Chinese for me.
It gives me the impression that it is a fight of spirits or ghosts to save the girl and her child, describing every detail in the way that only you know how to do.
I think I need a Webster dictionary 
Do not take it badly, many times I'm reluctant to make comments to avoid misunderstandings or flags. I think I do not know enough English to evaluate/estimate/appreciate your stories.
Well it's comments like these that I wish I knew many other languages to help translate stories to other languages, and or the Bananafish community had translators that help translate things so stories could be understood better than in non-mother tongues. Because all stories should be accessible in the mother tongues of the members in the community (so far English, Spanish and Italian). It make stories at least more intelligible to people to others, even if we have to push back publishing a story some more days to achieve mutual intelligibility. Also idioms are a killer, no matter the language.
That would be great