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RE: The Package - Week #49 of Finish the Story
Ohh what an intriguing ending, the boys father stashed away in her car trunk. Did she kill him herself?
A couple of things to watch out for in future - these things are easily overlooked but can be caught with a second or third read through, sometimes changing the font can help too.
to make sure there was no witnesses
to make sure there were no witnesses
There are a couple of instances where you confuse he/she
In terms of the actual story, I like that you made it clear how she felt about what she was doing, and that you explained the child. Would this have progressed into a tale similar to Rapunzel, being raised by a cruel woman who killed his father?
Hello @gaby-crb thank you for taking the time to read my post and especially thank you for writing this week's pront.
who was really in the trunk was the mother of the child, she was not dead but rather sedated, who sends the message to the phone is the father of the child who returns from a long trip.
But your interpretation can also be correct, I have purposely left that margin of interpretation for the reader to create his own story in his head, I had written a paragraph where the woman begins to wake up in the car of her captors who saw her beautiful and lamented her destiny, but I decided to eliminate it to let the end was something more intriguing.