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RE: Sharp Clouds in Eden (Finish The Story Entry)
I like the relationship you created between Kalliska and Mushashi, you provided a lot of history within the limit.
Poor Kal, you built up the idea of Heitor being a copy really well, “That unpredictability she’d never been able to replicate.” Hits in the gut.
Thank you, i do love this practise at painting things more succinctly ;)
<3 love that you said that, I felt like i rested a fair bit on that line in terms of trying to carry through the emotional connection between them from the first half