I'm not sure I understood everything. But as your version reveals itself to me, it is a myth of creation and the eternal struggle to let go of the transience and despair that the living consciousnesses have with it. That this fight seems lost in the end and a divine creature - like death - does not want to let anything escape. In the end it is so. One could be indifferent to this and still love life. The beginning of the story of @f3nix has given the direction, I think, because what you once initiated seems to have already progressed a long way.

Very well told!