RE: Mental burnout, leave note at door
This is a story with an unmissable point, but there is a really good plot in here that shows consideration for and reflection on the first half.
The switch of perspectives feels almost like part of your signature style for FTS, jumping away from the character in the opening. You paint the scene here really well, there are some great bits of description, as always framed in the more external point of view of your style. I really enjoyed your more simplified descriptions, that still took some considering, but came together so very well. The way you describe the office chair <3
An interesting way to play on the first half, the person hoping to impersonate a family member of the deceased dankworth might actually be a family member! A fun way to twist this. There is the implication that the character in the first half was in some way expecting the email and may have taken steps, or done something, to get it. I really love how you have played that so whatever they did, it didn't matter, as the email about helping someone pose as a relative was a feign, and Ms Micheal has just been informed Ms Danksworth may actually be a descent of our dead man.
Had me very intrigued as to what information Ms Danksworth would provide that would help Ms Micheal crack the code to Ian Dankworth's bank deposit. This is only added to by the amount in the bank being considerably more than stated in the email. How deep does this scam run!? Very much enjoyed your picking up on the scam hints in the fist half, and how you worked with them.
Wonderfully done, working with elements in the first half to build a story with an unmissable message.
On a side note - 'kerel' was a bit of SA slang I didn't know, and very appropriate as it adds to the point you are making on gender and gender assumptions, using a word heavily associated as male, for a woman ;)
UwU ~ Thanks for reading and thanks for the compliments and analysis and taking the time to read this and oh my God yay you read it!!!!~ :D :D :D :D
As long as people don't find trouble with it, gotta keep running it to give the (possible) information on the other side of a story. But yes, thanks for noticing my brush strokes and the style of the strokes now~ And yes, it was a pleasure to not sneer and jeer the SHOW in "Show, don't tell" and use both Show and Tell like a human being!~ And yes, very reminiscent of our fellow bardzopajak (veryspider) <3
Yes, very good explanation of what has happened here, and a better analysis of the farcical nature in the second half just so happening to work out here. And of course, life really does have a way with actions to do with what it wants to do but we all love life all the same with whatever it does with us~
Indeed, I am wondering myself what possible information good ole Ms Danksworth could provide to Ms Michael as to figure out the grand bank deposit. Feels like the story is shaping up to a pink panther like story or comedy heist story. But yes, I wonder even if the clientel of the scam know how deep it runs!!!! We can only tell maybe by [expunged]
Dziękuję for your comment once again, mój kochany.
Post scriptum: Proszę for the new word of "kerel" now~ (And good eye on noticing how that plays into the story!!!!~)