RE: Sharp Clouds in Eden (Finish The Story Entry)
Aww, Cal! You give us this beautiful heartbreak! With your deft hand you delivered this powerful tragedy of lost friendship and love and the wistful wish for things to be different between the Master Grower and Musashi. The standoff between these former friends, caught between memory, regret and the paths that their choices have brought them to comes to a wonderfully orchestrated but devastating conclusion.
Your reveal of Heitor being a synthetic copy of her love was perfectly timed, as I'd been thinking from the Colonel's statement that something awful had befallen him (an illness or injury) but not that he was dead.
Kal's countermeasures with her upload of the stolen defense and her Titan rising to destroy the frigate as the light faded from her eyes was completely epic!
Ohh thank you so much <3 you really saw so much of what I didn't quite write which is just amazing <3 in my mind, the three had discussed taking some form of action, but Musashi had remained loyal to the empire, ratting out their plan, and costing Heitor his life and it makes me so very happy that the aspects of that i tried to paint in there came through.
There was a bit about his daily gestures that just made it feel like he could be a recreated copy, I love it when a first half gives me a chance to really get into the human (or not lol) aspect of the story, and let the action play out behind them, this gift from @f3nix was perfect for that <3
I really pulled the ending together to try and keep the words down (i do love the challenge ;) ) and I was worried it may have lost some of the punch for that, but yey! thank you!