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RE: Flynn. Finish the Story Contest - Week #54

in #finishthestory5 years ago (edited)

Thanks to your story, I'll be more hesitant to drink any tea that's been offered to me!

I enjoyed the mystery that you added to the tale. Having Agnes, shown as more than just a kindly cook, and the flash drive with the 'truth' sets the curious cogs turning in a readers mind. Flynn is naturally terrified (effectively phrased with the 'loosened sphincter' and 'half dead lambs eyes') since he believes he's heading off to his death.

Soon enough, the cards are on the table and we are given an answer to what was on the computer screen and how depraved Father Thoram truly is. Quick thinking and deft misdirection save Agent Flynn in the end as the disturbing and greedy Father suffers a fitting end by his own hand. A cheer to you for an entertaining story and making Flynn a hero in your ending!

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The old swaping trick, hehehe

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