RE: 16 days of literature: Particle Ghost
I am commenting, because I know how we authors enjoy those comments, but can't vote until later, perhaps even tomorrow--but I never forget. Hate it when my VP gets too low.
As for your extended haiku--what great fortune that I just listened to Evangeline the other night. I wondered, as I listened, how many people have the patience for poetry of such length? And then I thought, their loss. People often don't have patience for verse that is any longer than a sonnet.
Your piece is very affecting.
with before him the great foe:
it is still himself
If I read correctly the man struggles for his soul and recognizes that the struggle is within himself. In the end, he is victorious, and I am happy for that.
I think poetry is a good medium for you. This is an expressive form that allows for impression and sensation. These you are good at conveying. Words flow from you with feeling. Poetry is about feeling--of course there is concept behind, but feeling is allowed as it is not in prose.
Reading your long poem was a very enjoyable exercise for me.
UwU ~ Thanks for commenting and thanks for reading!
While I would agree for a crowd like Petite-Bourgeois and Bourgeois peoples that are on Steemit, I would disdain from Proles who do use Steemit as a secondary income and have lil’ time. Moreover, there are Economic causes (which then translates to Cultural causes that sooner or later feeds back to the Economy) that would make Proles and other workers not want to read long things, but it is disdainful when Petite-Bourgeois and Bourgeois peoples that not only have time but also the money to read things like novels but don’t. The real kicker is that Proles would be interested but the education failed them and make them think its bad (that and the cult of STEM which wants to reign supreme when it needs both the philosopher and economist on their sides to make them effective in their capacities and more individual as they help other professions more individual when together). But this is even before we get into talks about how this effects the various genders and gender expectations within cultural expectations...
Indeed, that is a correct reading; this is mainly me taking the Dialectical theme from the start and continuing it as a Dialectician while also playing off my sympathies for Stoicism (not anglo lowercase s stoicism, the philosophical Uppercase S Stoicism). So I wanted to focus on a Dialectical overcoming of being gripped by externals and him coming to realize what is in his control and what is not, but to not excuse himself of his wrongs and make him confront the errors he made. Because at the end of the day, his rival is of the same class as he; his failings is to recognize his rival as his equal, that he possesses the same ruling class status (as Partriach of the village) as he.
I must admit I did have fun in it, here here for another prompt where I can get away with it again.