Feast Is Over. A Fifty-Word Story for @Jayna
I was glancing over penny dreadfuls and news from Victorian times, trying to find inspiration to write one of my own. Then I remembered I had not written my entry for @jayna’s 50-Word Challenge, which prompt word of the week was “feast.” I decided to write it in verse.
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The feast of blood has been left behind.
The beast and the teeth, finally hidden.
Of all pleasures in this life forbidden,
mine was certainly one of a kind.
Old age, dear friends, meets even vampires.
(So now I lay down, as if dead...)
stiff and avid in finest attires.
About the Making of This 50-Word Story in Verse
There is not much to say about this. There are two stanzas; verses are rhymed and follow ABBA CDC rhyme scheme. Being the lines of five feet each (iambic pentameter), I had to be careful about word count, so I had to break its iambic rhythm in the last line to make the previous line sound longer than it really was: it is only four feet (iambic tetrameter), as a fifth foot would have made two extra words I could not afford. The result? Well, the rhythm turns slower at the end, which is good, I think, for the story becomes more serious and pathetic towards the end.
The image that inspired me was this picture: an old vampire who has become too weak (or tired of immortality) to go hunting; he is in his coffin, in what seems an eternal retreat.
Thanks for reading.
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Nicely done, @marlyncabrera! And thank you for the poetry lesson. I studied poetry so long ago that I have forgotten everything. I have no gift for it, so I rarely try. I can see from your poem that it can be a good storytelling method!
I've been having fun in this challenge, and I've learned some valuable tips, too. I felt like doing something different; however, it would've been nicer to have the all the lines in iambic pentameter.
Thank you, @jayna ♥☻
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