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RE: Finding Freedom in the Desert

in #fiftywords6 years ago

Oh my, I feel thirsty reading this! You've done a great job of creating tension in your story.

I have two suggestions for edits: Change "dessert" to "desert". (Dessert is what we eat.) And take the word "is" out of the sentence "How much farther is did he have to go...."

Nice work!

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