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RE: [Fiftywords] Melted Away... (Micro Fiction)
Oh. Ha ha! Yeah, you mentioned coldness all around and frozen chocolate. So I never picked up on anything about heat. And I thought the melting part must be part of a game because of “game over.” 😊
Ah, thanks for the feedback, I put the "hotness outside" as the first thing in the story though. I think people who re-read it can pick up on that.
Oh! There it is. I have no explanation for why I missed that! I see now.
the 69 words version had the action of "opening the door" described but I wanted all the important parts to stay... sorry.